Bunnies on coffee
Ok, I'll have to admit- I'm not too sure where to start with this....
Firstly I admire the detail of your work- it's the airliner in the background during the 1st scene which shows your level of dedication to this project. Also the bullet holes come with a puff of dust, and change according to material, perspective and ammunition...
I could go on to fill this whole space with all the bits I like, but the moments I love which are truly awesome:
Rifles with a bayonet [knife] attached have been around a while- but seeing that sword with that gun on it, well congrats on designing one of the best weapons I've seen.
The shield play with the riot police added a new level to the violence, along with the comedic moment where Snowball pulls the shield back so it slaps a grunt in the face. Genius.
But the one moment that will always be remembered- because in that moment you made your audience feel true empathy for the character - was Smoke's cry
of pain as the coffee wore off.
So thank you for producing this violently awesome piece of art. It may of been two years, but it was two years well spend on your behalf, and well worth us waiting for.
[oh yeah, I showed this to a mate; he says that his rabbit does this when it drinks coffee, I don't know if its true - but the name kinda stuck, sorry]
Haha thanks. Btw that was Dust screaming, not Smoke ;)
Just one question...
How come we see the Saviour re-attach his head and hand in his leaving notice [part 6.5] when in part 6 we see him with head fully attached sweeping leaves by the train tracks?
I can see 3 main points that'll greatly improve your work;
1) Speed up the framerate; 20-30fps (frames per second) is a good speed for a flash animation. Your current speed is a bit to slow, and makes it look 'choppy'.
2) Use separate layers for the people walking, and the background- that way you don't have to keep redrawing the background for each frame! (There's a button to create new layers on the bottom of the timeline)
3) Don't use the brush tool for backgrounds- the line tool makes for easier adjustment and looks less sloppy.
That being said- the best thing to do is take your time- never rush it, and practice.
PM me if you want any more help- or use at the flash tutorials on here.
Thanks for the tips, and the tutorials I watched on Newgrounds never really went into depth with backgrounds so I just had to kinda wing it on this one.
Attention to detail...
...is what I like about this flash- like Dr Who's TARDIS in the background.
Overall this was extremely enjoyable, even though i didn't understand all the jokes and movie references (the blue-screen of death was one of the best).
And as for the glitch at the start which crops the screen- for those of you which had the problem- try using Google Chrome to watch it. It worked for me anyway.
It's a good start...
But there's still a lot of room for improvement;
Firstly being there's too much text. It's not just me being lazy- that much writing would be better as a narrative, try doing it as a voice over. (Spelling and grammer is ok- but could use a brush up).
The plot is very good- hence the higher rating, but again there were a few bugs that really got to me. (If you're going to follow the Plot from Mortal Engines- check out the official site - you can fill yourself in on the history of the Traction era).
If you're not- then I apologise for the above- and you may continue as you please.
The animation is quite good- but again you can still improve- try shape tweening the map when you show the change from Before to after.
Also just add more- when you mention London - show us London. Show Manchester fitting it's jaws.
Your graphics look ok- there's some nice vector work at the start- but try to stick to one method- using the mouse+paintbrush on the world map kinda messes it up. (it's ok- you're not the 1st to do that!)
And on a final note- just to tidy it up a little, you need to liven up the title a little. Plain text is ok for narration/speech. C'mon its your main title! Pythonic Pistons! Add some artwork, show a little pride! - It should stand out! Jesus Christ- you're using Flash, not windows movie maker!!!
-Sorry, It just really bugs me. Thats all.
But if you only ever have one piece of advice- KEEP PRACTICING
Thats the best way foward.
It started out good...
and when i say 'good' i mean frontpaged good- this could of been a really deep and meaningful flash...
... but then "OMFG Dick!!"
and you wreak it.
my advice- remove the penis. Please.
NEVER, IS MY PENIS !
laughter is the best medicine
and this one could cure the world
the music, animation, and graphics were all perfect, and i couldn't of done it better myself.
This is probably the flash of the year.
awesome!- one of my Fav. flash series
it's the attention to detial what i really like- such as the flying blood splatter, and the reference to your music artist in the poster for club M.
i also like the twisted humor and irony- like at the start; 'please do not jump through this window and kill everyone inside'
really really awesome!
this has a LOT of potential
once fully compleate, and with sound fx- this will be really awesome!
so keep at it!!
this is awesome!!
how many mushrooms did you have to eat to think of this?
None. I don't like mushrooms much. Their texture is rather yucky. =P
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